Maduw of the Long Stylus
Late during my employment with Sexyfur, I was asked to write a comic strip for the main site, featuring all original characters. I was still on an ancient Egypt kick at the time so I wrote this. I believe they did ultimately hire someone to draw a few pages, with significant changes/edits, but it was never completed. I was never told why, but I believe that readers just didn't go for it. At least I /did/ get paid for this script.
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Stylus
Chapter 1: Ray of Light
Characters:
Maduw (Old) – An elderly, gray-haired Fennec Fox with a noticeable paunch. He should still have the look of someone who was once very handsome. He wears an robe and a black wig, along with traditional makeup. He wears gold around his neck and on his wrists and hands, to signify wealth.
Maduw (young) – fennec fox in his late teens. He wears a small traditional headdress and makeup, but has no adornments. He wears an Egyptian skirt and plain leather sandals. He a large, visible, flaccid bulge under his skirt flap.
Sati – Fennec fox in her late teens. She is the “girl next door” type with average breasts, good hips and a nice ass. She wears an Egyptian skirt with a light wrap around her breasts that covers them in a manner similar to a strapless top.
Chenefer – An older fennec fox in her thirties. She is a MILF and Sati’s mother. She wears a very short skirt with a belt and no top at all, as well as big hoop earrings, makeup, and no top. She wears sandals with flat heels. She has bigger breasts and a bigger ass than her daughter has, and looks somewhat trampy or trashy.
Amret – An older fennec fox in his early forties. He is thin, slightly emaciated and decidedly unattractive. He has a permanent scowl. He wears a full-body wrap (think like a toga) that does not fit properly and lots of jewelry. He is a decidedly unhappy person.
Name meanings:
Maduw: the Egyptian word for “writing tool” and “penis”
Sati: Goddess of the sunbeam
Chenefer: “che” means the moon or one’s butt, “nefer” means beautiful, her name means “beautiful ass.”)
Amret: means “vengeful”
Page 1:
[[Panel 1]]
Maduw (old) sitting under a fig tree and holding a small wooden tablet, which he's using a desk as he scribbles hieroglyphs on a papyrus scroll. He's using a large quill-style stylus to do so. In the background is the Nile with Egyptian style boats going down it and the pyramids in the far background, with wheat fields in the area near the river.
Maduw (old) : “I am Maduw of the Long Stylus. Some call me “Pharaoh's beloved”, while others call me the Seducer of women.
[[Panel 2]]
Closer shot of Maduw, looking down at his scroll
“I am the wealthiest man in all Egypt, Syria and the wild lands... I have fully tasted the success of life, and here I record my story.”
[[Panel 3]]
Shot of Maduw's hand writing on the scroll...you can use either heiroglyps or whatever kind of writing you like.
“May Thoth guide my hand as I tell how I achieved that which most only dream of…”
Page 2:
[[Spread of young Maduw walking down a market street, with a roll of papyrus in one hand and several quills jammed into the waist of his skirt. He looks a bit “nerdy” despite his attractiveness.
(In a thought square, as if old Maduw is still telling the story)
“I was a handsome if socially awkward young lad, working as an accountant for my father’s firm.
[[Second Panel]]
Maduw walking past an alleyway and being enticed by a sexy, topless hyena girl. She is curling her finger at him, inviting him over.
(thought square) “I had few friends...and my parents, while supportive, believed I was a bit of a dullard.
[[Third Panel]]
Maduw and the hyena girl kissing in a back alley. She's tugging at his skirt.
(thought square) “But I had a secret…”
[[Fourth Panel]]
The hyena babe down on her knees, having removed Maduw’s skirt. She is agape at his size, which is comically large, but not big enough to be impossible.
(thought square): “....One that was lauded in the under city, but only whispered of in the inner circles of the more respectable women”
Page 3:
[[Panel 1]]
The hyena girl sucking Maduw’s dick.
[[Panel 2]]
Maduw, against a wall, looking down at her...
“Ohhh yes....just like that, Meya!”
[[Panel 3]]
Cumshot, Meya swallowing Maduw's load...
Meya: Mnfff!
[[Panel 4]]
Maduw is still fully erect. Meya is rubbing his length and smiling, a trail of cum from her mouth to the tip of his cock.
Meya: “Mmmnn...not bad- but it looks like you want more...”
[[Panel 5]]
Meya from behind, showing off her ass and mound.
Meya: “Be gentle with that thing, okay?…”
Page 4:
[[Panel 1]]
Meya being plowed from behind.
Maduw: “Mnfff…You're so tight, Meya!”
Meya: “Only because you’re…ahn! Hung like the sphinx!”
[[Panel 2]]
Depicts Meya and Maduw from beneath, showing the penetration and Meya’s boobs bouncing.
Meya: “By Ra's Eye... I’m gonna cum!
Page 5:
[[Panel 1]]
Maduw pulls out...
[[Panel 2]]
...and Cums all over Meya's ass and back...
[[Panel 3, Half Page]].
Meya laying down, propped up against the wall in the alley. She's smiling happily, her tongue is lolling out and she's groping her cum-soaked breasts.
Meya: “pant...pant....Gods, Maduw, I've never felt anything like that in me before!”
Page 6:
[[Panel 1]]
A smiling and dressed Maduw walking away from the alley, while a cleaned up and dressed Meya waves happily to him.
Maduw (thought square): They called me “Long Stylus” because of my exceptional size...even the women of ill repute gave me “discounts” because they enjoyed me so much.
[[Panel 2]]
Closer shot of Meya, looking wistfully after Maduw
(thought square): “I was also a repeat customer...”
[[Panel 3]]
Sati leaning against the doorframe of her house, looking into the distance, as if waiting.
Maduw (thought square): “But then there was Sati... ironically enough, my neighbor. I couldn't even approach her.”
[[Panel 4]] Sati looking disappointed as Maduw walks by, clearly afraid to talk to her.
Maduw (thought papyrus): “As her name suggests, she was a ray of sunlight in a dark world...she was so pure, my courage faltered whenever I saw her.”
[[Panel 5]] Quarter page. Shot of Sati, looking like she's formulating a plan...
Maduw (thought papyrus): “Little did I know that she wasn’t going to let my shyness get in her way…”
Page 7:
[[Panel 1]]
Sati pouncing on Maduw in his bed. She's putting a finger to her lips to shush him. Maduw is very surprised.
Maduw: “Sati? What in Set’s name are you doing here?”
Sati: “Shhh! Do you wanna wake the whole neighborhood?”
[[Panel 2]]:
Sati eye-to-eye with Maduw and grinning. She looks excited and horny. He looks nervous.
Sati: “We've been doing this little dance for too long, Maduw...”
[[Panel 3, Wavy border to indicate flashback sequence.]]
Sati hanging up the laundry (topless) while Maduw stares at her dreamily from a nearby window.
Sati (thought square): “You think I haven't noticed the way you look at me?”
[[Panel 4, Wavy border to indicate flashback sequence.]]
Sati leafing through papyrus scrolls with a dreamy look in her eyes.
Sati (thought square): “...And don’t think I don’t know who’s been leaving those love poems in my scrolls...”
Page 8:
[[Panel 1]]:
POV shot from Maduw's point of view. Sati is crouched over him and grabbing his crotch through the sheets.
Sati: “More importantly, I've heard rumors from the brothels of a well-endowed scribe using the name 'Long Stylus.'”
[[Panel 2]]:
Sati has pulled down Maduw’s sheets and undergarments, revealing his enormous erection. She's astonished.
Sati: “The...rumors...were true! Wow...I had no idea…”
[[Panel 3]] Maduw is looking satisfied while Sati begins to work his tip with her mouth and massage him with her hands.
Sati: “ Mmmm…”
[[Panel 4]]
Maduw is now standing while Sati kneels in front of him and works on his shaft, bobbing up and down.
Sati (sound FX): suck, gurgle, slurp
Maduw: “Ohh Sati...I...”
Page 9:
[[Panel 1]] POV from Maduw’s perspective.
Sati has pulled off to catch her breath and is rubbing him with both hands.
Sati: “I bet you thought I was just some innocent, pure flower, huh?”
[[Panel 2, Wavy border to indicate flashback sequence.]
Sati is in a “pleasure palace” wearing Egyptian style jewelry on her head, neck, hands and legs but nothing to cover herself. She is riding a fat alligator while sucking off a lion.
Sati (thought papyrus): “I’ve been sneaking away at night to earn money while building up my skills…”
[[Panel 3]] Sati is rubbing Maduw with one hand while licking her lips.
Sati: “And now I'm going to show you what I've learned!”
[[Panel 4]] Quarter page. Sati is deep-throating Maduw, looking up at him with wide eyes.
Sati: Mnfff!
Page 10:
[[Panel 1]]
Maduw being sucked by Sati. He's gripping the bedsheets and biting his lower lip trying to restrain himself.
[[Panel 2] Sati pulling off and licking her lips, a trail of cum from her mouth to his cock.
Sati: “Mmm...I know what you've been wanting, Maduw.”
[[Panel 3]]: Sati lying down, nude, on the bed. She's spreading her legs wide and reaching down to her sex, spreading her labia with her fingers and giving the viewer a deep view.
Sati: “...So come and get it...”
Page 11:
[[Panel 1]]
Maduw’s tip being rubbed up and down lightly on Sati’s sex. Should show that it is going to be a tight fit.
[[Panel 2]]
Second panel: Maduw sinking into Sati, pushing lightly and sinking down.
[[Panel 3]]
Maduw getting Sati into the missionary position. She is wrapping her arms and legs around him.
Sati: “Oohh...slow down- no one's filled me so much...ungh...before!”
[[Panel 4]] Shot from behind of Maduw working himself inside of Sati. The shot should be through the legs and show the penetration.
Sati: “Nnnghh...but don't stop!”
Page 12:
[[Panel 1]]
Maduw grinding and fucking Sati in the missionary position. Sati has her arms and legs locked around him and is rolling her head back in ecstasy.
Sati: “Ohhh gods yes! I've been waiting so long for this!”
[[Panel 2]]
Maduw gritting his teeth and closing his eyes, he's exerting himself.
Maduw (thought square): “She feels so good…I can’t hold out any longer”
[[Panel 3]] Quarter page. Shows internal cumshot of Maduw dumping his load.
Maduw: “Ohh Sati! I love you!”
Page 13:
Full-page spread. Depicts an exhausted and fucked Sati smiling meekly but happily on the bed. She has her fingers in her hair and is gripping the sheets with the other hand. Her legs are slightly spread and she has a visible, leaking creampie. She is basking in afterglow.
Sati: “I love you too…”
Page 14:
[[Panel 1]] Sati and Maduw cuddling in bed, asleep
Old Maduw (thought square): “It was the happiest night of my life, having her asleep in my arms.”
[[Panel 2]] Sati sneaking back out through the window at early dawn.
Old Maduw (thought square): “Little did I know…”
[[Panel 3]] Maduw cleaned, dressed and on his way to work. He looks startled. Chenefer’s hand is on his shoulder. It has nail polish and several bracelets.
Old Maduw (thought square): “There would be hell to pay the next morning.”
[[Panel 4]] POV of Maduw looking at Chenefer as she grips his shoulder. She has a mischievous, evil grin on her face. She is wearing lots of makeup and jewelry and is topless.
Chenefer: “...You were with my daughter last night, you filth!!”
Page 15:
[[Panel 1]] Maduw brushes Chenefer’s hand off his shoulder. He looks confident and indignant.
Maduw: “Of course I was! We love one another, if given my way we'd be married at the next full moon!”
[[Panel 2]] Chenefer, still mischievous and sly.
Chenefer: “Liar!! You seduced her, took advantage of her, and sold her in the brothels!! Do you deny it??”
[[Panel 3]] Maduw incensed with anger.
Maduw: “WHAT? Who told you such lies! By Ra's light I'll-“
[[Panel 4]] Chenefer chiding Maduw, who is fuming with anger.
Chenefer: “It doesn't matter what you say...what matters is what I say to my husband. Understand??”
Page 16:
[[Panel 1]]: Maduw , shocked, a bit frightened perhaps.
Maduw: “You didn't...”
[[Panel 2]]: Chenefer grinning and looking very evil.
Chenefer: “No. Not yet. Whether I do depends on me getting what I want…”
[[Panel 3]] Chenefer grabbing Maduw’s genitals through his skirt cloth.
Chenefer: “And I think you know what that is, don't you?...”
[[Panel 4]] Maduw looking angry & embarassed, Chenefer confident that she's beaten him, and will get what she wants.
Maduw: “May the gods forgive me…”
Page 17:
[[Panel 1]] Chenefer laying on her bed, spreading herself for Maduw, beckoning to him, much like Meya did. He's in the foreground, still doubting whether he should be doing this.
Maduw (thought square): “I can't lie before Thoth. I should have ran. I should have protested...but I didn't. I...allowed myself…to fulfill her need.
[[Panel 2]]: Maduw is eating her out, playing with her clit with his tongue
Old Maduw (thought square): “Though I hated her for doing this to me, she was skilled in such matters...”
[[Panel 3]] Chenefer riding Maduw cowgirl style (can be reverse cowgirl if you want).
Old Maduw (thought square): “But the more I strained to hate what was happening, the better it felt.”
[[Panel 4]] Maduw closing his eyes and groaning, straining as he tries to not enjoy himself.
Old Maduw (thought square): “Slowly, my resolve left me. I had never felt such guilty pleasure in my life.”
Page 18:
[[Panel 1]] Maduw riding Chenefer, in the “Scissors” position. Chenefer is moaning and groaning, enjoying herself, and Maduw is giving in, panting and groaning in delight.
[[Panel 2]]: Shot of Maduw pulling out...
[[Panel 3]]: ...and cumming all over her mound and belly. She's licking her lips, having thoroughly enjoyed herself
Old Maduw (thought square): “Finally, when she was finished, she told me to get dressed and leave. I thought that was the end of it.”
Page 19:
[[Panel 1]] Amret, raising his arm and pointing while two guards rush out behind him with spears and shields.
Old Maduw (thought square): “I was naïve, to think that bitch would keep her word…”
Amret: “Guards! Seize that filth!”
[[Panel 2]]: Shows Maduw being held by the guards. He is struggling against them.
Amret (off panel): “He sold my daughter and violated my wife!”
Maduw: “She's lying! She’s making fools of all of us, you have to see that!!”
[[Panel 3]]: Amret looking very angry & unsympathetic.
Amret: “Slandering my wife to save your own skin...how low can you sink?”
[[Panel 4]]: Maduw is being dragged off. Chenefer is watching with a contented smile. Amret is still pointing accusingly.
Amret: “See that he goes on trial tomorrow morning, and then gods willing, to the executioner!”
Page 20:
[[Panel 1]] Maduw sitting in a dark cell with straw and the bones of a dead prisoner. He is sobbing.
Old Maduw (thought square): “I thought all hope was lost, and wished only to reunite with Sati in the afterlife.”
[[Panel 2]] Sati handing over her mother’s gold jewelry to two shady figures.
Old Maduw (thought square): Little did I know that once again, Sati's impatience would prevail...”
[[Panel 3]] Twin jackal girls wearing all black, “ninja” like outfits. They are examining the jewelry, appraising it. They are each armed with a Kopesh-style sword and five small throwing knives. They are mirror images of each other in the way they dress and lay their outfits/weapons.
Jackaless 1: Yes, this will be enough for his escape…
Jackaless 2: …and his flight to Karnak...
[[TO BE CONTINUED]]