First works to write, hopefully a beginning to a beginning

Story by randwulf09 on SoFurry

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I've had this story in mind for quite a while but could never really think of how to write it or weither anyone would like it...its based off a event that happened quite a while ago. also, this is the first story ive ever tried to write...so...be gentle

you can think of those in the story as furry or not. its open to what you want but generally i guess you can say its not furry.


The last thing remembered was the adrenaline rushing through the veins, brought on by the sudden realization of what was going to happen and what was currently happening. Thoughts ran rampant through the mind while time seemed to slow to a crawl, a near infinity passed before everything stopped. Darkness enveloped the vision and mind. Pain started than stopped. Breathing grew shallow untill it felt that there was none left.


I awoke in the hospital. Ears ringing a bit, head hurting and pulse pounding. The first thought that went through my mind was my now pregnate girlfriend and my child of two years old. Searching around the room i saw it was vacant. A click caught my attention as voices flooded the room as i looked to see a doctor entering, before i could open my mouth to ask he told me that my family was fine. a hesitation caught my attention but i let it slip from my mind, relief overtaking me. "They where fine." i thought to myself. a sigh of relief came from me as i lay back down. my body was already healing, i could feel it. the doctor took a exam to check and make sure nothing was wrong, he than told me i could leave after spending the night, that way they could watch and see if any problems would develope in the short term. car-crashes where after all, unpredictable. a few minutes before going to sleep i was starting to doze when i heard the door open and felt my brother near me. it was odd how that happened. when he was near me i could "feel" him there. it was a hard feeling to describe but i guess it could be close to having two magnets close to each other. my brother sat at the end of my bed and watched me, a small smirk on his face "I'm surprised. you are alive derrick, things seemed pretty bad but i should have known something like that wouldnt hurt you that bad." he chuckled softly before getting up and walking to the door, his last statement seeming odd as i heard him say it "You know...ill always be there to help should you need it. You just have to ask. You don't always have to take on life alone. I am your little brother after all." a small smile came to my face after he had left. despite how he acted he cared alot more than he let on. at least i could rely on him.

The night passed quickly. In the morning i was released from the hospital and was allowed to leave with my family. my unborn child healthy. my daughter with a small bruise on her arm from where the seats teathers caught her and kept her safe and my girlfriend in good condition, despite a small bump and bruise on her forehead. At first it didn't hit me but when i thought about it i realized. My brother had preferred to stay home and watch some T.V. His favorite shows had been on. A small scoff came from deep within as i thought about how in love with those Stargate shows he was. I shook my head, glad he hadnt been with us when we crashed. I looked to my girlfriend and kissed her on the lips before hugging her, a horn being honked having caught my attention. i looked to see that my girlfriends mom had come to pick us up. the car was gone now, probably in some scrap yard. the crash had been pretty brutal on the car but it had held up and saved the family. i couldnt help but smile at that fact, glad that my fathers present to us had saved everyone.

Things went normal as planned. I was a little surprised to see my brother wasnt around. noone was saying anything about him, which wasnt all that unsual since he normally kept his distance from family and spent alot of his time either alone or at the library chatting with friends. I shook my head and headed downstairs to my room. Ever since getting out of the hospital i couldnt help but feel that something wasnt right. something was out of place or had changed. i just shook my head and yawned a little before laying my daughter down for bed and crawling into bed with my girlfriend. only two more months till i had another daughter. my third one. a sour thought ran through my mind as i thought about my oldest daughter and how my marriage hadnt turned out to well. god how i missed my daughter and wanted bad to have her with me, terms wouldnt see my daughter to me for quite some time and at this rate probably never. a sudden realization had formed in my mind, that feeling of something having changed was accompanied by the thought and i suddenly felt sad. I shook the thought from my mind and cuddled with my girlfriend before going to sleep, glad that for once. my daughter had passed right out.

During the next day my brother, daniel, was gone again. it was odd for him to be gone for so long or to not even bother to see what had happened and checked if everyone was alright. I turned to my girlfriend and told her i would be back, i wanted to go see my brother, and considering it was a monday, he would more than likely be at the library again. She asked me if she wanted her and our daughter to come with, i couldnt help but notice the change in her mood, i shook my head no and told her it wouldnt take long to find him.

I got to the library and was surprised to see him there, outside, sitting on a bench staring up at the sky. a small smile came to my lips as i walked towards him, the smile quickly vanishing since i needed to keep up my older brother image. "Why are you outside and not inside playing on the computer or talking with your friends" he sat up and turned to look at me a small shrug coming from him as a reply before he stood up and walked to me. "I just don't feel like being inside today, how about a walk through gibson. Been forever since we hung out together, ever since you got together with her." he smirked a bit and started walking not even waiting for a reply. i couldnt turn down a offer to hang with my little bro, we rarely did hang out nowadays. family. work and life in general took up alot of my time. We spent a hour walking around gibson before i decided to head back to the house. i asked him if he wanted to come but said no, he had to go meet one of his new friends. i nodded and started walking home.

the rest of the day was pretty uneventful, though i did stay up untill i heard the back door open and close. it was daniel. he walked in and headed to his room, not bothering to say hi or anything. i noticed that he didnt turn on the light. must have been tired. i shook my head and made a mental note to ask about his new friend and weither he had eaten there. Weeks passed by and life returned to normal, oddly, my brother spent less and less time around. anytime i talked about him those in the family near me would get quiet. it sometimes made me angry that they treated the mention of his name that way, sometimes i wondered why they hated him so much. I just shook my head and pushed all the thoughts to the back of my mind.

A few months passed and i finally got a new car. first things first. i wanted to take a cruise with my girlfriend, newborn child, daughter and my brother. I stopped in front of the house and went inside telling everyone we were going to go for a ride. i was about to ask about my brother when i heard a car door shut. i turned around and saw my brother in the front, passenger side seat waiting for us. i was surprised he knew it was my car but i didnt really think much on it since i had just come from that car and went into the house. i went downstairs and got my girlfriend and children. i told her that daniel was already waiting outside and she blurted out to stop it. shock overtook me at her remark. i turned to her and tilted my head a little "What do you mean?" she sighed and lowered her head "You know he's been gone since the crash...why do you keep beating yourself up over it." Another jolt of shock overtook me. why would she say something like that, why would she even think that. for the past couple months since the crash i had been spending time with him. talking to him. hanging, it was there that my thoughts stopped. i thought back to all the times i had hung out with daniel. the weird looks i had gotten when i was talking to him. the sudden quiet from people who knew the family and what had happened. i dont know what was worse. the sudden uneasy feeling that came or the sudden shock of realization that flooded my mind. the truth.

I saw the car accident in my mind. i thought back on it and it was clear now. crystal clear. i remembered hearing my brother say "Son of a" than getting cut off. the sudden jolt as we hit than the quietness that came. i heard a small kind of cough followed by my brothers soft voice "When we get out of this I'm going to kick your ass derrick.." he was dead? i couldnt and wouldnt believe it, he had come to my hospital room. my mind was flooded by the memory of that and the realization that noone had been there. when he had said what he did say it had happened when i had a heartattack a few months earlier. Everything came flooding at once than everything quieted. the truth had hurt and i had been blocking it out for months, everything had changed because he was gone and i didnt want to believe it but than why did i still feel him around. I placed my right hand on my head and fell to my knees. My brother was gone. dead in a car accident where i had been driving us.

i felt the tears coming. a sudden pain shot through my body and i screamed, i suddenly felt different. everything seemed wrong. i heard beeping and felt someone touch my arm as well as say "you had better not die." everything went black before everything came to focus. i didnt know how much time had passed or where i was. my first thought was about what had happened. thats when i heard my brother, derrick. he was talking to someone. i was confused as to what had happened. everything seemed real. yet at the same time it wasnt. i blinked my eyes and looked around my brother was near me. it looked like he had actually been crying. a smirk crossed my face as i looked at him. good, i thought, something to tease him about later. i breathed deeply before trying to sit up, i wasnt able to. my head hurt and my lungs felt weird. i was surprised to see that i was being held onto the bed by restraints. upon looking at a doctor who was nearby he answered my unsaid question "You where hit on the head pretty bad and wouldnt hold still so we could treat you." i shook my head slightly and relaxed. i couldnt help but feel like something was different but i knew i was alive now, or at least i hoped i was. i didnt know what had happened. i remembered the dream i had and wondered why i had viewed it through my brothers eyes. nothing made much sense when i thought about it and i found myself pondering it. had i died? i didnt know nor did i care at the moment. i had a feeling that it would make a good story to write sometime after i figured out what it all meant.


and bam. stories over x3. its a odd way of writing up one but it seemed better in my head...any crit would be welcome and just in case anyone is curious. everyone in the crash was fine. and i didnt go with them because i did want to watch a stargate series that was on. weither my brother actually things the way i tried to go for or not i cant say. him and i are alot different in ways of mental and physical comparison. but hey.im glad with actually being able to get this down. i know its not great but im hoping to write some more.