Miss Terry (Comic script)
_This isn't really a story, I suppose, but I thought I'd post it here out of curiosity. I've been toying around with Celtx, which is mainly for screenplays, but allows easily-generated comic book scripts as well. This was an idea I had for a story a while back, but I think it would be so much better as a comic! It's fairly weird and the writing isn't traditional, since I'm trying to be descriptive more than anything. I didn't want to go overboard on details, however, since if ever an artist draws this, I'd want them to be able to interpret it to add their own details as well.
It's a fun piece, I think, and I hope it makes sense with the way it's laid out here. Each paragraph is a new panel. It's only 13 pages, which doesn't really work, but adding an extra page would be easy - I'd like a single-frame page in there somewhere, I think, and with a front and back cover it would equal the proper 16 pages.
Comments and advice welcome! This is one of my first tries at a comic script._
MISS TERRY
PAGE 1 (five panels)
A solitary character stands in front of a seedy bar on a dimly-lit street. A street lamp in the corner of the frame is the only light besides the neon letters of the bar's sign: "Tootsie's". The first "o" and the "e" are burnt-out but still visible. Figure is wearing a long trench-coat and an old, wide-brim hat.
Close-up of a fuzzy brown paw closing around the handle of the door.
The character, revealed to be an otter, takes off her hat and hangs it on a coat rack just inside the door. She smiles at some figure off-panel. Her trench coat hangs half-open, revealing a corset and a sizable amount of cleavage.
The trench coat is off and the cute, feminine otter is heading towards the bar. The corset is black and laced up in the back. Tight butt, long legs, etc.
There's an obvious bulge in the front of her corset, marking the otter unmistakably as a hir. The bartender waves and smiles, pleased to see hir. He's shirtless except for a black bow tie and wrist-cuffs.
PAGE 2 (three panels split into horizontal thirds)
The otter sits at the bar. There are just a few people in the background and nobody on either side of hir. The bartender is setting a drink down in front of the otter, a fruity drink with an umbrella.
Same shot, except more people in the background and someone on hir left. Most of the characters give off a gay vibe. There are a few empty glasses in front of the otter and the bartender is setting another in front.
Same shot yet again, except the bar is much more busy now. The otter is laughing with a cute male skunk sitting next to her and both have drinks in hand. Skunk wears a pair of tight, trendy blue jeans and a slim t-shirt. Very crowded background.
PAGE 3 (six panels - all quick, small shots)
The skunk and otter have their arms around each other as they stumble towards the door through the crowd. They're both smiling, but the otter's got a hungry look in hir eye.
Outside the bar. The otter has hir trench coat hung over an arm as the two pile into a waiting taxi.
Shot of the driver through the front windshield, looking a little peeved at the two making out in the back of his cab. Driver could be a horse. (Get it? Horse-less carriages?)
Cab pulls up in front of an apartment building and the two pile out of the cab. The otter is out first while the skunk pays the cabbie.
Skunk opens the door to the building and they head for a room on the ground floor.
Skunk opens the apartment door and is promptly tackled from behind by the otter, who is gripping his waist as shi grins hugely. They fall forward, laughing.
PAGE 4 (four quarter-page panels)
The skunk and otter are making out in front of the closed door. The light from the hallway dimly outlines them. The skunk's got a hand on the otter's bulge.
The otter pushes the skunk back against the wall with one paw and smiles beguilingly as shi brushes hir hair away from hir eyes.
Close-up of the two kissing again, just their muzzles in view.
Close-up of the skunk's paw wrapping around the bulge in the otter's corset.
PAGE 5 (five panels)
The two break the kiss. A string of saliva connects from the thick, black lower lip of the otter to the skunk's.
The otter turns away from the panting skunk and presents hir backside, clearly wanting the skunk to undo the lacing of hir corset.
The skunk undoes the laces - show from the side, possibly, with the skunk's erection visible through his jeans.
The otter starts walking towards the bedroom, looking over hir shoulder at the skunk as shi pulls away the corset, revealing hir heart-shaped rump and tail.
The skunk follows, pulling his shirt off to reveal a flat, white-furred belly.
PAGE 6 (five panels)
Otter is lit only by the moonlight through the bedroom window as shi continues walking towards the bed, ass waving side-to-side. A bit of light-brown cream visible between the cheeks.
Skunk drops his pants, revealing his tented underwear, and steps out of them. Otter sits on the bed in the background, legs crossed daintily, hiding hir sheath.
The skunk approaches the otter, who smiles up at him as shi pulls down his underwear, freeing his pink erection.
Close-up of the otter's muzzle kissing the tip of the skunk's shaft while looking up at the skunk.
Another close-up, but this time the otter's got more of the shaft in hir muzzle and hir eyes are closed.
PAGE 7 (six panels, larger for the first four, smaller for the last two)
Downward angle shot of the otter as shi pulls back and licks hir lips, a devilish smile on hir lips.
Side shot of the otter standing up. The skunk grins goofily at hir, obviously still a bit drunk.
The otter guides the skunk's paws to hir ample breasts and sheath, which sprouts a large ebon cock larger than the skunk's by several inches.
The otter slides hir arms around the skunk, pulling him in close to hir, mooshing hir breasts against his chest, as they kiss again. Behind the otter, a few shadowy, dark tube-like shapes form in the darkness from behind the otter's backside.
Close-up of the pair's feet, where a cock-like tentacle starts to creep forward. All the tentacles are thick and a deep black color. They have a cocktip at the end instead of a point.
Another close-up, but there are three tentacles now, poised to wrap around the skunk's ankles and legs.
PAGE 8 (three panels)
Show the skunk's arms and neck encircled by yet more tentacles, each thick as the skunk's wrist with a cock head at the end.
Show the skunk's legs and midsection wrapped similarly.
Large, two-third-page panel: the otter is grinning happily as the skunk is squirming, obviously distressed, but he can't do much as his arms are pinned to his sides and his legs are spread. The otter's real cock is thick and throbbing, even spurting a little pre-cum already.
PAGE 9 (four quarter-page panels)
The otter lowers the skunk towards hir and grins as shi strokes two tentacles near hir shoulders. They spurt out a little fluid. The skunk looks very distressed by this point, but is still hard.
The otter's tentacles pull the skunk down over hir cock - close-up of the penetration shot.
Close-up of the skunk's face, eyes wide and blushing, as another tentacles starts to push into his muzzle.
Back out again to a similar shot from panel one, only the otter is fully inside the skunk and he's blushing furiously, his own cock hard and drippy, getting into whatever it is he's got into.
PAGE 10 (four panels)
More tentacles come out, wrapping around the skunk as the otter pumps into him delightedly. The skunk is obviously starting to get into it, despite the weirdness. Fluid leaks from the corners of his muzzle.
Tentacles continue wrapping around the skunk, until his chest, belly, and arms are almost completely covered with python-like tentacles.
Close-up of the skunk's face as his cheeks bulge with fluid, some of it dripping out at the corners of his lips. A tentacle is wrapped around his forehead now and more appear just on the border of the frame, ready to continue wrapping him up.
Shot of the otter, moaning with pleasure as shi plays with hir breasts, hips still pushing forward. A mass of black tentacles are in front of hir now, extending from behind hir backside, though where exactly they're sprouting can't be seen.
PAGE 11 (four panels)
The skunk's body is completely wrapped in thick tentacles now and the otter pulls hir cock back, leaning hir head back with obvious pleasure as cum spurts from the tip, splattering on hir tentacles.
The tentacles pull the skunk's legs closed, forming a single, writhing tube of cock-tentacles.
The tentacles begin to squeeze in smaller and tighter as the otter sits back on the bed, running hir paws over the heavy mass and leaning against hir backside, where the tentacles are all sprouting from.
The tentacles squeeze even smaller and tighter, rolling around on themselves. There's obviously not nearly as much mass inside the mess of cock-tentacles than there should be.
PAGE 12 (two panels)
The otter's tentacles start to spread, but there's nothing between them. The otter's paw slides over one tentacle in particular, however, showing it's obviously important. The tentacle is pink-ish up at the tip, the same color as the skunk's, but is rapidly turning black like the others.
Close-up of the otter's face. The otter kisses the tip of the new tentacle just as shi kissed the skunk's cock earlier. Shi holds the spurting tentacle in hir paws tightly. It's now almost completely black like the others except for the tip.
PAGE 13 (four panels)
The otter is dressed and leaving the apartment. There are no signs of the tentacles.
Shi gets into a waiting cab on the street.
Shi smiles out the window at the passing street, leaning against a fist. Just beneath the fist, the outline of a tentacle can be seen, dripping slightly.
Long, birds-eye view of the cab and surrounding streets.
CAPTION: The end.