Pokemon: Darkest Taboo, Pt. 4 + 5 rewrite

Story by zaft dodger on SoFurry

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#3 of proofed

I really enjoyed the plot of this series by Logan Storm but there were so many typos and grammatical errors in the beginning that I nearly stopped reading any further. When I got through 51 chapters I decided to tidy it up a bit so other readers wouldn't miss out on a good story.

This is a rewrite of "Pokemon: Darkest Taboo, Pt. 4" (and 5). I have tried to leave the actual story line intact as much as possible without changing the direction of the story (something the author expressed concern for when I recommended getting a proofreader) but I did substitute some of my own words and rearranged some sentences so they made more sense. This piece is not written how I would have done it so please don't think this is my style.


The first rays of a new day filtered through the curtains of the room where Jack & Co. had weathered the fierce storm that had run wild through this part of the Anthro Region. The damage it had caused was impressive but nothing that could not be replaced or rebuilt. The fatalities had been low but, as expected of a storm with such high winds, tragically inevitable.

A knock on door to their small room roused him from his slumber. He groggily sat up and found Oni curled up at the bottom of his bed while bunny and Blaze where asleep in each other's arms. Were it not for the patch of red feathers and beige fur surrounding them, he would have thought they had been up to something sexual in the night. As it was, even in his sleepy mind he could tell they had been fighting again, but that was nothing new. The two of them always had arguments that turned physical. Yet somehow they would wake up and be the best of friends again.

Jack had given up trying to stop them ages ago as he always ended up getting knocked back on his ass while they fought over top of him.

There was another knock at the door.

"I'm coming!" He announced to whoever was behind the door. Turning the handle, he opened it to see the black police uniform belonging to the region's police force; the silver of the badge and buttons complimented the whole look of the officer's clothing rather well.

A Houndoom sat smartly to his right, ready to obey whatever command was given to him or her. The dark/fire-type was the equivalent to the Kanto region's Police mascots, Arcanine and Herdier. The Houndoom was intimidating to say the least; perfect for keeping people off balance and making it hard to come up with any realistic lie.

"Sir we need you come to the main lobby; something happened last night and we need to ask everyone in the Pokémon centre some questions." The police officer said sternly, his tone making it clear that it was not a request but an order; a tone which caught Sneasel's attention as she awoke. Oni stretched briefly to warm up before settling into a crouch. Houndoom began to growl at Oni who gave the Pokémon a level stare while her claws eased out, ready for anything.

"Oni she can be a tad feisty when rudely woken up first thing in the morning," Jack said apologetically, turning so the officer could see she was ready with Steel Claw, a move that was super effective against Houndoom since it was part dark-type. The officer was wary of the feline Pokémon, her ears where laid back flat against her head in a clear sign of aggression.

"Houndoom Return!" The Policeman called out, putting the Pokémon away. The Officer was not there to start anything and from the looks of it the Sneasel was more than prepared to go against any command to protect its trainer.

"You've got a very loyal friend there, son, but I would appreciate it if you come ** to the lobby."**

The man did a good job of diffusing the situation, the Sneasel calming down and curling back up at the foot of the bed; but kept one eye open and fixed on him.

"Certainly. Just let me get freshened up and I'll be right down." Jack replied politely, still smiling.

The police officer nodded and backed up slowly, not intending to turn his back on the Senasel; especially given their vicious reputation. He was relieved when he the door closed and moved to the next room to rouse it's inhabitants.

"Well Oni, wanna come with me and see what this all about?" Jack asked the Sneasel.

[May as well.] Came the dark blue furred Pokémon's reply, grudgingly getting to her feet. She would rather have stayed asleep or even returned to her Pokéball and slept in there while being carried around but someone had to watch her trainer's back; especially since the other two were still asleep. Oni stretched and yawned before grabbing Blaze and Bunny's Pokéballs and recalling them both in a beam of light.

"I should freshen up first but I'll find out what they want then come back ** for a shower."** Jack grunted dressing himself.

A good ten minutes later, Jack arrived at the lobby to a scene of chaos as Trainers, Breeders and Coordinators all sought answers at the same time from the Police that where holding them in the Pokémon Centre while they investigated what had happened to Nurse Joy, the large hole now present in the PokéVault, and a tunnel that led into the nearby forest.

The fact the CCTV had been taken out by the perpetrators left the authorities with many unanswered questions and two dead Scyther who were likely Nurse Joy's rapists.

"I understand people's frustrations but I must ask you all to calm down and wait ** while we continue get everyone's statements." **An Officer Jenny announced.

Like all her siblings, she looked pretty much identical with the odd subtle difference here and there. A lot of rumors were going around as to the reasons for this, them being clones was the most popular one. The same was said of the Nurse Joys but it was all conjecture.

Jack sighed and he found his gaze moving over to the large map of the world mounted as a large framed picture. There where so many different regions out there; some big and well known, some small and not often in the limelight.

In spite of the chaos, Officer jenny was managing to keep things from escalating into an all-out riot; something the police didn't have the numbers, let alone equipment, to stop. Even with one of the Jennys present, tempers where starting to wear thin. It took more than two hours to question everyone and still learn nothing of what and happened. Sneasel had curled up on the seat next to her Human and began to snooze with one eye half open. She watched one the officers approach Officer Jenny and whisper in her ear.

"We are questioning the last trainer now but we're getting nowhere. What do we do now, Ma'am? Do we continue to hold them here and question them all again until we __find out what actually happened?"

Jenny sighed and slowly shook her head whispering back to him.

"No. If we tried to do that we would have a riot on our hands; while a lot of the trainers here probably aren't that strong yet, it would more than likely be those who are that would do some serious damage. We don't have the muscle to make everyone stay if they decided to make a fight of it. Besides, no matter how many times we ask we'll just keep getting the same answers. Until Joy is finished being treated by gynecologist and the therapist, we wont get any more answers __here."

The other police officer snapped a salute which was sharply returned by the Jenny who then spoke to all those in the lobby.

"Ladies and Gentlemen I would like to thank you for your cooperation; you are all free to go about your business. A Pokémon Nurse has been sent up from the Pokémon ** League to cover for our Nurse Joy."**

Jack was glad to hear this as his own questioning was ongoing and quite a tiresome affair. The pockmarked officer was asking him where he was all night -in his bed, asleep- and if anyone could corroborate this. His Pokémon being the only other people in the room didn't seem to satisfy his interrogator who continued to repeat the question.

"Where were you last night? Come on lad, tell me the truth." The man grumbled at Jack, whose reply was equally repetitive and unchanging.

"In. Bed. Asleep!"

The man opened his mouth to ask again but Oni had had enough. She jumped down from her seat to stand between the police officer and her trainer, an angry growl voicing her displeasure.

"Get your Pokémon under control or I'll do it for you!" The man said sternly, taking his own Pokéball and sending out his Houndoom. Sneasel was on the attack the instant it appeared, her claws digging into his sides while burying her fangs into the dark/fire-type's neck and putting the canine of balance with her ferocity. Pale with fear, he drew his sidearm and was swiftly set upon by a large number of nearby trainers who had been waiting for a reason to start something.

"Is there a problem here?" Came Officer Jenny's voice, catching the tail end of the somewhat loud conversation. It was starting to draw unwanted attention from the other agitated people.

"Yeah, this guy provoked his Sneasel and then pulled his piece," one the trainers said angrily.

"LEROY JENKINS, RECALL YOUR HOUNDOOM RIGHT NOW!" She bellowed at her subordinate, a glaring dangerously at him.

The man immediately did as he was told and holstered his sidearm. The crowd was close to the breaking point by now and she needed to calm things down quickly before the riot she had been trying to avoid kicked off.

"I apologize for Officer Jenkins, he will be severely dealt with. I must say that is a very loyal Pokémon you have there kid; and considerably well cared for, too. I doubt such a pokémon would willingly leave your side for a instant. So, Sneasel, ** you were with your Trainer in bed all night as he claims?**" Jenny asked the Sneasel who gave a sharp nod of her head and voiced her confirmation firmly.

[Yeah, he slept like a log!]

Officer Jenny couldn't understand a word but Oni's tone easily broke the language barrier and got the point across.

The man turned to speak to Jenny only to have her raise a silencing hand to him.

"I believe you. Pack up, boys, we're leaving. There's nothing more we can do 'til ** Joy can make a statement and forensics wraps up in the vault."**

With that, the local constabulary took their leave. Jack sat back down and started to shake as the adrenaline rush faded. Oni gave soft, reassuring purr as she jumped up on to his lap, hooking her arms around his neck and licking his face with her rough tongue. Holding her close, he buried his face in her soft warm fur; glad she was with him now that it was all over with. Many of the people still present continued to vent their outrage amongst each other over the annoying hold up but they were drowned out by the Sneasel's happy purring.


======================= Chapter 5 =======================

Jack had spent the rest of the morning trying to forget about the stressful commotion from the Pokémon Centre by taking in the PokéStar Studios production of 'Froslass __Garden'. It had been given top ratings and had subtitles so the viewer would know what the Pokémon where saying; or at least what the director had decided to script.

The soft female voice of the film's narrator began to speak as the film started.

"The beauty mortals possessed was but fleeting and spoiled so swiftly. For a ghost pokemon, time was meaningless and they did not age in the physical sense; not even __for those that were dual-type Pokémon.

"I had been hatched next to a dawn-stone, whether this was by design or accident I shall never know, fated to be a Froslass.

"As Time, the Great Enemy, passed by, it would break my heart to watch the beauty of mortals become ravaged by it's merciless advance; fated to die in it's unrelending march forward.

"So many beautiful features lost forever... Nay, I did not like such things one iota, nor did the others of my kind. They preferred to keep the company of other immortals. unable to bear witnessing such tragedy.

"Some such as I strove to save these mortals from their fate, granting them the boon of eternal youth and admittance to our gardens of living ice statues; untouchable by the ravages of time.

"Sadly, many of the mortals could not see our acts as a kindness and resisted. This was to be understood, and even forgivable; for how could something so young, so short in life, comprehend the gift of escape from such a fate?

"While my own garden contained some pokémon, they were but substance, forever trapped in frozen sleep to dream sweet dreams that nourished us.

_"But the humans where forbidden to our hungers, for they are our precious charges. We stand guard eternally, shielding them from death wrought by time." _

The snow swept landscape set at night began to open up to a number of Froslass drifting above the ground towards a pokémon trainer's tent as the Narrator __continued.

"Just beyond the cavern -a portal to the Great Garden of Living Ice- I could feel the presence of something magnificent; a prize most worthy of my own personal sanctuary. Drifting through the veils of reality, I descended through rock and snow appearing as if from nowhere.

"In the distance I beheld a most wondrous human walking through the forest; a young boy brimming with life. One look at his features made me tremble and quiver with barely retrained desire, he was by far the most handsome of human I had ever laid my immortal eyes upon and I was determined to save him. There was no room for doubt or question; it was imperative I deliver this human from the ugliness of age and the permanence of death.

_"Suddenly I lost sight of him! A surge of panic struck with such power it was as if my world was crumbling around me. I raced through the air, passing through anything obstructing my search for this perfect mortal. I could not loose him, I would not let this one slip through my fingers. His beauty was to spectacular to be lost; I __simply refused to allow such a fate befall one so gifted. _

_"A gnawing sensation filled the pit of my stomach as the pain and loss began to overwhelm me. A howl of pure despair left my lips, stilling the air around me in an eerie silence. _

"Then it happened; my eyes widened as hope and joy filled me once more."

At this point in the film, the trainers head had popped up; searching for the source of the strange wailing. Upon drawing closer, the Froslass could see the tent he had been erecting to shelter for the night.

"Moving swiftly, not daring to waste time, I advanced upon the human's location. It was then that I paused, a rush of jealously flaring through me. He had Pokémon with him; he was a trainer.

_"I would need to tread carefully, lest I join these luckless fools; becoming prey and forced to bear witness to such beautiful youth being whittled away. __First the Pokémon would have to go. Even if I were to spirit the boy away, they would come looking for him. Not that I could blame them; he was a fine male indeed.

"Soon I felt the presence of another of my kind, they had heard my lament and had come with all speed to aid me in my righteous quest to save this mortal from his fate. No words needed be spoken; they would deal with the Pokémon and most likely store _

_them so they might feed upon them later, but the human was mine." _

As the trainer's Pokémon settled down within the tent, a soft haunting melody filled the air as each Froslass began to sing, adding their own voice to wondrous sound. Down below, an Evee, Emolga, Pachirisu and a small little Pichu all curled up next to the human, snuggling closely for warmpth.

The five victims began to drift deeper and deeper into a sleep four would never wake from. The Froslass began to descend phasing through the fabric of the tent to breath gently upon the sleeping Pokémon, freezing their bodies keeping them in a state of eternal slumber to be fed upon for all eternity. The tamed Pokémon delt with, Frosslass appears floating above her chosen prey. She does not freeze him yet, she wished to immortalize him in a state of bliss and serenity; not horror and fear.

[Awaken mortal, awaken to my voice!] She lovingly calls to the young man, rousing him from his induced slumber. Looking up with flickering eyes he finds himself looking into her eyes; so soft, so loving. Everything around him was hazy, as if some kind of mist filled the tent.

It was all so surreal. His conscious mind concluded he was asleep and this was all a dream- especially when he watched the Froslass lean down parting his lips with hers. The cold kiss chilled his face yet made his blood rush as his body began to heat up. It felt so good, even if it was probably wrong to kiss a Pokémon like that, but then it was just a dream so what did it matter? Reaching up sliding his hands behind her head he drew her closer; deepening the kiss, feeling the icy tongue move along his own. The wet warmth of his mouth seemed to delight the Froslass as she drifted closer, running her hands slowly across his chest and easing open his jacket; delicate fingers unbuttoning his shirt to get at the hot, silky-smooth skin beneath. A soft moan left her lips, muffled by his warm, smooth tongue as her cold hand moved along his skin. The striking difference in their bodies temperatures made even the slightest caress a sensual experience.

"Remembering that mortals needed to breath I broke the kiss, reluctantly. I could see him looking up at me panting, his lips quivering from both the experience and the chill of my presence. It began to dawn on me that perhaps this was his first time experiencing the delights of such intimacy with a female; if that was the case, it made this rescue even more special."

The Froslass smiled softly as his eyes open and he looks deep into hers with such love and passion that she almost missed her chance.

"It happened instantly without pain or suffering, the frost from my breath crystallizing every cell in his body. He turned to ice, his beauty preserved in a state of pure happiness.

"I had done it! I had saved him from the great enemy, Time. He would now take prized place in the sanctuary of the Froslass Garden, suspended in life eternal."


The screen faded to black and the credit began to scroll upwards to music of the Froslass's earlier song. Jack was wide eyed, holding Bunny on his lap and wondering what had possessed him to watch the film. He doubted he would be able to sleep come bed time.

[It's okay Jack, shhhhhh!...It's okay!] Bunny cooed and hushed her dear Trainer while her ears draped reassuringly around him.

She wondered where Oni had gone to as it was normally the Sneasel's job to do this. Oni was creeping along the back row which -apart from one man- was empty; or at least it seemed to be empty. She heard a Pokémon's voice whispering to him as ice cold fingers drifted up the man's jeans.

[Do you want me, human?] The Froslass spoke to him. Her words were uninteligble but the meaning was clear as she made them take form in his mind.

This was something new to Jack; he had never experienced a Pokémon actually wanting to pleasure him before. It was dark and he was positive no one could see them so he nodded slowly, feeling somewhat nervous and unsure how to proceed. Froslass, however, knew exactly what she wanted and how to acquire it. Her cold icy hands moved down the front of his jeans, easing down his zipper and she made short work of the belt. His jeans fell around his ankles and her small cold hands grasped the waistband of his briefs, brushing her cool body against his thighs. She could see the effect it was having on him by the growing bulge in the fabric.

[Oh my, you're so big!] She gasped, removing the final barrier and running her hands along his sizeable member. She laughed softly as it twitched between her palms, a little precum escaping the tip. A cry of pleasure left the young males lips as her cold tongue traveled up his hot, thick length. He tasted so good she could not help but caress him again with her tongue.

Looking down at the female Pokémon Jack wondered if this counted as his first time since she was just a floating head and arms. The question was driven from his mind as she drew back his foreskin with chilly palms and she slowly took him in her icy mouth, engulfing the warmth radiating from it.

"Hnnnng," he moaned. Despite the cold it still felt so incredible, so overwhelming that he would have released his fertile seed immediately had she not paused to deny him.

[Not yet, my human, not yet]

She was deliberately teasing him, her small cold tongue lapping at his tip. She loved the warmth of his member between her lips and the cute sound she made as she did so. Eventually she began to work her way down, slowly taking more of his shaft into her mouth. Pushing back and forth as she floated between his thighs, she drove him crazy; milking him like a Miltank, her hand stroking the exposed length she could not accommodate with her mouth.

She felt the growing heat from his body as she continued pleasure her human lover, bringing him to the very brink over and over again only to deny him every time. Panting deeply, his head shook from side to side as he lay there in total bliss, would have to remember to catch a Froslass of his own.

An unfamiliar sensation was rapidly building at the very base of his groin. His breaths became ragged, the sign Froslass was waiting for; she increased her pace, suckling and bobbing hungrily while her small cold palms squeezed around the very base of his member and just behind his balls.

It proved too much for him to bear, her mouth suddenly flooding with his hot seed. She swallowed eagerly, gulping down each pulse and pumping his length a few more times to get the last few drops. She floated happily up to eye level, watching him in his afterglow. The right moment came when his eyes met hers she parted his lips, slipping her small smooth icy tongue along his. She was more than aware of the Sneasel's presence; if anything, it had turned her on even more having an audience.

Bunny felt a tad shocked and disgusted with herself as she sat astride her trainer and she ground against him. She could feel herself becoming moist as lewd thoughts of him filled her mind. She swiftly shook those images out of her head in disgust.


The rest of Jack's day proved somewhat frustrating as his scheduled Gym Battle was postponed due to the storm having torn through the Gym's roof and gutting the main battling area.

Jack hung his head and clenched his fists as he watched teams of Machokes cleared the wreckage under the supervision of a formidable looking Machamp who barked out orders, and in some cases, lending four powerful arms to assist on some of the extremely heavy areas that proved too much for any one Machoke alone.

He had been so looking forward to trying for his Eevee badge as the Gym Leader there was big into Eevees and their multiple evolutionary forms, but his plans were ruined; he doubted the Gym would be open anytime soon, either. Jack knew he'd be better off heading to the nearby town and trying for a badge at that Pokémon Gym instead of waiting.

"Well guess we're training today then heading to Moore Bridge Town tomorrow." He said to his three female Pokémon, sighing. Blaze was disappointed -she enjoyed a good fight- but the prospect of training made up for it a little. Oni and Bunny did not share this view.

[Stupid Storm, should have guessed this would happen!] Oni grumbled, annoyed with the trend of bad luck befalling their trainer.

[That Movie didn't help matters any; it took me hours to calm him down.] Bunny added, not even wanting to know what the Sneasel had been up to while she had been comforting Jack and fighting off that disgusting sensation to breed with her own Trainer. She still couldn't believe she had gotten aroused when she had sat in his lap.

[Maybe we should put our little plan into effect?] Blaze suggested, causing Bunny to scrunch her pretty little snout at the thought; though she had to admit that had their trainer been a Pokémon she would have been more than happy to drag him down to the ground and ride him into a sexually charged oblivion.

[I need to do a little more research first; these Humans have odd customs and ways **of doing things.]** The Sneasel declared.

Jack looked on, wondering just what it was the three of them where discussing. He puzzled over why they kept looking at him and smiling in a way that creeped him out a little especially as they all did it in the same way at the same time .

"Uh Girls why are you smiling at me like that?" Jack asked, only to be answered with even wider and unsettling grins from all three of the female Pokémon as they took his hand and lead him away and letting out a light chuckle that made him feel almost as if he was being led to his imminent doom.


From a nearby alleyway, a shifty looking woman dressed all in black with an open trench coat that almost hid a large red 'R' on the front of her jersey watched Jack and his team with narrowed eyes.

"Are they the ones?" She asked the underling behind her who in turn looked at Jack as he was dragged away.

"Yes Ma'am!" He replied, recognizing the Blaiken and Sneasel and feeling a sense of outrage at how they had forced him to abandon the heist from the previous night. He had never felt so humiliated when confronting his superior, especially when she laughed in his face in that cruel mocking manner that belittled him so much.

"I see. Well those three Pokémon look like they could probably more than hold ** their own in a fight, we'll tail them and watch them train. Well see then if they were the real reason you failed or weather you're just incompetent and worthless."** She mused, the red painted lips upon her dark ebony face turned upwards in a mirthful grin, enjoying how her subordinate's fists shook in outrage at how she had just chided him; it amused her to no end to see men squirm powerlessly before her.

"If his Pokémon are indeed that good we shall take them from him; that, or convince him to join Team Rocket." She added, raising a hand to silence the man as she heard him begin to say something. She hoped the Pokémon were as weak as most men, in her opinion, were, so she might partake in her favorite pastime of seducing and brainwashing young trainers to become her obedient pets. If the three Pokémon where worthy of acquisition she would have to seduce and kill him; a policy created after some twerp from the Knato region not only destroyed many a well formed plan, but forced Giovanni, their leader, to disband the great Team Rocket several times. Further proof of how weak men where; if she or another woman had been in charge, the trainer from pallet town would have been crushed under foot the moment his path crossed Team Rocket.

It would be a shame to kill him; this trainer looked quite cute to her and made her want to scoop him up like a big sister and push him up against a wall so she could corrupt him completely.

"Crobat Follow Him!" She growled to her Pokémon who hung lazily upside down from one the pipes high above her.

[Yes Mistress!]

With that Crobat dropped down a few feet before unfolding its powerful wings, taking to the air to follow after Jack at a discreet distance.