Test Fight Scene - Criticism Needed

keyblade..his mind told him. he threw a glance at the figure and got into a new position. he hadn't been taught to use a sword, let alone this new weapon, but it came naturally to him.

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off to the Olympus Coliseum !

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goodbye Christmas and Halloween town

Jack started to glow as the three use their keyblades to open the next world sora: we better get going tsume and jake: yes ! santa: before you do sora... tsume and jake: no !

SIDE KICKS ?!?!?

Tsume and jake pulled out their keyblade it was about to leave but sora stop them ( oh and apparently sally is ok seeing she's hooping with one leg) jack skeleton: what are you planning to do with sandy claws? oogie: who ?

End Of Our Worlds? Not today Chapter 09

At the teleporter, they cross path with young teenage boy with spiky brown hair blue eyes, tanned skin, and lanky build wielding a keyblade saying that he is looking some a friend named riku and he thinks he may find him here.

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victory is the next best thing !

Yelled jake as he pointed his keyblade at pete making him back up scared pete: this ain't over !

Kingdom Hearts: china here we come !

As they all got into fighting stand and tsume jake and sora summoned there keyblade ping: what are they ? sora/jake: heartless sora: huh , jake when did you get here ? tsume: nice to see you again sora (smile) sora: t-tsume , is that you ?

meeting back up with friends

Tsume and sora some summoned there keyblade and fought off the nobody's after the battle they heard a voice as they turned and saw a guy in a black coat guy: impressive princess tsume: uh oh guy: by the way have you seen a man named axel?

Airy Thoughts

And the keyblade master hissed as she found her womanhood. practiced fingers found her clit, making her blush and moan from the pressure as she played with it, gently swirling and nudging.

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BACK TO MULAN !

Tsume said as she pointed her keyblade at the guy like she just saw the boogie man and then they were surrounded by heartless that was floating in the air and the guy was gone once again jake: what the hell are these things ?!

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Ryan's Adventure

Jonathan summons his keyblade goes rushing into battle. ryan steps away slowly before leaving the cave. he could hear the echo of grunts, shouts of him saying spells and the weapon hitting with a 'clank'.

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Back to zombie island : Port Royal

Something strange going on and that well has been away for far too long and she wanted us to go help him so we agreed to help her and of course jack being the jackass that he is wanting a woman to go save the guy i wanted to bash him over the head with my keyblade

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