Some critiscm or some form of... Guidence? Would be great; I'm just blindly hoping to get better at this writing thing, so some comments or tips would be great.
Enjoy...
Chapter 15: A Cold Loss.
Rain silently fell, lightly pelting the land...
Canine, Character Development, Feline, Female, Male, Story Progression
**Luna and Thief Chapter 17: Resonating Ruminations**
While small shards of sunlit cheery trees had peered amongst the forest floor below, Logan, Trevor and Rebecca continued onward through the thick woods. Logan went to check his compass again while...
Action, Character Development, Emotional, Friendship, Gay, Growlithe, Love, Multiple Species, Mystery, No-Yiff, Pokemon, Relationships, Romance, Story Progression, Story Series, Straight, Suspense, Vulpix, espeon, leafeon, mightyena
Luna and Thief Chapter 20: Jagged Choices.
There it was! His nose stuck to the ground while he sniffed every bit it could reach. His plump creamy orange tail flickered left and right in the bright sunshine layered streets... He sniffed absolutely...
Action, Character Development, Emotional, Friendship, Gay Relationships, Growlithe, Love, Mystery, No-Yiff, Pokemon, Romance, Story Progression, Story Series, Straight, Suspense, Violence, Vulpix
**Luna and Thief Chapter 18: Thrill of the Fight.**
Griffin woke up at least several different times that night and stared at the roof of his tent constantly. He couldn't sleep from the start; his tired eyes began to wander along the roof as he...
Action, Adventure, Character Development, Comedy, Eevee, Eeveelution, Fight, Kissing, Multiple Species, No-Yiff, Pokemon, Romance, Vulpix, combat
Luna and Thief Chapter 23: Onward to Cerulean City!
It was early in the morning when Griffin managed out a phone call. Very early, but he expressed to the transit employee the situation and they permitted him to take the bus from Vermillion to...
Character Development, Character Driven Narrative, Character Progression, Emotional, Gay Relationships, Marill, Multiple characters, No-Yiff, Omniscient, PG 16, Pikachu, Pokemon, Story Series, Straight relationships, Third Person, Vulpix, mightyena
**Luna and Thief Chapter Twenty-Eight: A Conceited Encounter!**
A smell made her nose huff and sniffle, one that made her stomach churn and her head spin thanks towards recirculated air and the strong sanitized mist that fluttered against linoleum...
Absol, Bad Language, Battle, Character Development, Character Driven Narrative, Crobat, Eevee, Emotional, Flareon, Growlithe, Lucario, Multiple Species, Mystery, Ninetales, PG 16, Pikachu, Pokemon, Story Progression, Story Series, Suspense, Sylveon, Vaporeon, Violence, Vulpix, ariados, butterfree, combat, espeon, glaceon, mightyena
Luna and Thief Chapter 27: Along Frozen Shores:
A glow of bright light flickered and flashed against gentle warm fur, a warmth beyond any other swirled against his chest as his heart gently throbbed and pressed against the air. It was that cold...
Arcanine, Character Development, Character Driven Narrative, Dark, Fight, Fighting, Growlithe, No-Yiff, Omniscient, PG 16, Pokemon, Romance, Third Person, Violence, Vulpix, espeon, mightyena
Luna and Thief Ch: 3 Brad The Lucario Trainer!
"There it is!" Whatever the feeling it swept over them all and made them shine with the sense of accomplishment. Pewter City, the sign again and again by the trainer, as if he was certain it wasn't real....
Clean, F, Feral, Growlithe, Human, Lucario, M, Pokemon, Vulpix
Luna and Thief Ch: 2 New Friends
The stars seemed endless as they twinkled and softly lit up the night sky with gentle kisses that brushed against the small clouds above her. How she came to terms with this Pokemon trainer was still confusing. _He's...
Clean, F, Friendship, Growlithe, Human, M, Pokemon, Straight, Vulpix