A Fated Reality-Chapter 22

** **critique me; i don't know where, but it felt like i missed something...** **moncheli!**

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So it Begins

This is also my first non poetry item submitted to any kind of public viewing so please critique me. most of the spelling errors should have been taken care of, but there might be some grammar mistakes.

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Truths

I also ask to critique me as gently as possible. this is my first time writing a story with sex in it. inspiration for this story: starcraft ; pendulum - watercolor, witchcraft, under the waves, and set me on fire.

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The Deer Hunt

Serena grew positively catlike as she asked, "can i have bobby critique me as a dog? he has the experience, since he took care of sheila."

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