chapter 1: how is your lemonade?
Just to let everybody know, this is the revised edition of the first chapter. the purpose of the revision is so that the store doesn't look like a complete eye sore. you will not find anything new in this version, it just looks better.
AltDoom2
Yet another sheet with revisions of the revisions to the revisions.. signing all 7 pages and initializing all the signatures, he tossed the batch into the outbox and closed his eyes.. "sire has cracked his hoof again..
The DogBoy Incident
#1 of untold scenes: the dogboys **the dogboy incident ver. 1.01** _authors note: slight revisions to syntax, grammer, as well as **minor** changes to content to bring it up-to-speed and consistent with where the series has gone in my brain.
The Magnum Opus - Chapter 4
The blond bear’s amber eyes flared in intensity but the revised did not move. “are you a scavenger amongst predators!?” cliff challenged.
College Life: Chapter 5
I take it you've revised your socks off." "nope i never revise for these kinds of tests. i do the work beforehand and the lecture is usually a consolidation of my knowledge.
Reaching for the Stars - Chapter 28: A Panther and a Wolf
"sorry, i have revisions to do tonight." "too bad." the lion just laughed. "anyway, some guys caught your eyes lately?" he shrugged. "not really. why do you ask that?" "well, you didn't seem to have some chicks." andy slurped his soda.
Time Prison
Prologue As the pencil, a lost fragment of my past, sails through the air I begin to wonder why I wanted fame and fortune. Was it because everyone knows you for everything good you have done and won't tease you for a lack of anything? Or was it that I...
How The Andrew Smith Stole Halloween
He announced the coppa revision to the government. halloween gets a fine in jail time! and so mr. smith prepared for halloween. he dresses up as donald trump. he goes out for the night and he goes out for the halloween. mr.
"Daggers of Darkness" - Prologue
#6 of daggers of darkness, book 1, into the black here's the (revised) prologue for the first book of my sci-fi adventure series, "daggers of darkness, book 1, into the black".
The Encounter Part 4
I sat for hours, writing, revising, rewriting, adding details, removing details, and simply breaking my own story apart to make it the best i could. in the end though, it was about 20 words too long.
The Party(Revised)
Ok, this is the First Yiff story I wrote, and I posted it, but under the name UberElite... I F-ing lost my password when Yahoo decided to delete my old email adress.. bastards, anyhow I made a buncha changes, and am reposting it. I have another story...
A New Brother Part 19
The panther always seemed to be stressing out with drake doing his best to guide him through the revision.