Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which Brothers Will Be Brothers
All comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** "i don't need to be reminded of our pasts when enough comes to mind about it already," tyrannio snapped. "i'm well aware of both our histories enough for my understanding.
Other people are there for you: Srsly (Get 5 Beta Readers!)
Having people critique your work and edit it for you is, yes, very very handy. but don't make them edit it for you until you've fixed every potential error you can find. asking for ideas is fun, sure, but you need to figure out the shocking truth.
Introduction: Bellatrix
critiques appreciated, even a little goes a long way. thanks for reading. both characters in the story belong to me. pockett peaked out at the busy roads from under a drippy storm drain. water sprayed as motor vehicles passed by.
Pokémon: Phazon Purple, Patch Notes
Chapter one - version 1.1 (based on critique by: xials92) - - minor spelling errors fixed. - improved lucia's speaking parts and clarified final scene interactions. - version 2.0 - - minor direction errors fixed (north, south, east, west, etc.
Preamble
I would be grateful for suggestions and critique, as long as they are constructive. and to repeat myself: i know i have taken lots of artistic freedoms with the lore... so to all you hardcore tabletop warriors... please, just have fun...
On the Run Chapter 1
Lets get this started' ------------------------------------ end of chapter 1by pcinvisiblecomments and critiques are appreciated
That Day
Note from the writer- this is my first story, so feel free to critique it. i accept you're feedback. april 7, 2008- 5:00 am "riiiiiing riiiiiing!" the alarm clock sprang into life, singing the song of its people.
NewU - The Coed
First foray into this kind of thing, any and all critique welcome. jesse's backpack clattered about the floor of her dorm. after the strap broke, she let it, it was only the cherry on top of the mess that was the raccoon's day.
Tails and Sonics' Fun Time.
So, please give me fair critique's of how i could improve this story! thank you! _what........................_ _what have i done.....?'
The diapered skunk slave (Part 3)
I hope you all enjoy and feel free to leave feedback and critique, id love to hear from you guys and if you have any ideas for new story plots, please give me a comment, or pm. enjoy!
To Knock at Heaven's Door
Please critique and comment. :) the night began as any other; darkness sweeping away the heat to reveal in its wake a vast sea of shimmering diamonds. they beckoned. i obliged. the initial rush!
Kinky Kitty part 2
critique would be great and i hope you enjoy.