Manners
Then ty remembered: chazz had never asked for his critique on any of the clothes. was chazz doing all this just to screw with me? is it because i told him off? ty was certain of it.
Deaths demise (ch1)
I've not tried anything like this before so any constructive critique ia appreciated, please enjoy) "i had a wonderful dream last night, a man stabs me for an empty wallet and receives instead a bullet" dale lay there thinking of the wonderful dream until
Dress to Impress
This was the hardest part, and he spent many years under his father's red eyes, sharply critiqued and praised in short, quiet comments that were thrown as vincent left the room, or just before a dismissal.
Rhythm and Flow
Comments and critiques welcome, as always. enjoy! a red tail swished slowly from side to side as it attempted to find the beat and rhythm of the music blaring in the club.
Bane: Preface
Please comment and critique. disclaimer: this story is intended to be part of a series, however i realize that there will be times when i cannot deliver. when i'm down i cannot simply pull a chapter out of my husky bum. thanks for understanding.
One More Chance in Love
I would also like any critique of this from anybody. * * * a happy heart is what always brings good things to the table. a loving heart shares affections, caring, kindness, and felicity. but not everyone could keep that kind of heart.
A Dragon's Pride
Characters involved are my dragon vahnir and the snow leopard lucy, which i don't think i uploaded to here yet as i'm finding out.http://www.furaffinity.net/view/22482285/ nsfwhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/22509769/ nsfw enjoy and i'm looking forward to your critique
Story Tease 3: Camp Intercourse Part 2: T WIP
As always, comments and critiques are allowed. camp intercourse part 2: t by natsuru coming back to his senses, natsuru removed his dick out from the tree hole; his leftover dragon seed ran down out from the hole.
Evil Genius Ch. 1
Feel free to give constructive critique or comments. nothing spectacular happens in this chapter though unfortunately.
Chapter 1: A little warming up
In some strange way, this game of self-critique was very arousing, and the thought of his excessively feminine coloration had led collin to create a mental picture of himself as a female, perky boobs, tight pussy and all.
Keeper of the woods
_ _as always any critique is greatly appreciated :) _ toriels journal, 211x, month of ice my name is toriel dreemurr, i am the caretaker & sole resident of the snowdin woods and i live here in exile; exile from a throne i willing surrendered
A Trip in the Woods
Really looking for any feedback or critique. i know my writing is rusty, seriously need other eyes on my works. i'm hoping that by putting my content out there i'll focus on it more and get more inspiration and ideas on what to do with my writing.