Double Birthday Surprises ch. 1
"critical strike!!" he pounced directly on top of him, knocking him flat on his back; then bit him fiercely in the chest, revealing his weak spot.
Helfer's Busy Day, Chapter 15
"i cannot think of anyone less qualified than you to criticize the security workings of this palace." helfer shrugged. "you set a trap, but you let whoever it was get away? i don't know how much i need to know to criticize that."
Red Shadow
I probably won't be accused of killing them; the police know my m.o. and know that i don't use guns, but their captain is a known critic of mine. i'm going to die. i don't know when or where.
The Fate That Befell Yndyr: Chapter One
Energy critical. new power source detected. emergency bonding initiated.** **.** **.** **.** **\>bonding complete. beginning to power up systems** **.** **.** **.** **\>incomplete. organic memory detected. interfering with systems.
Highschool - Fitting In and Living Life Ch 4: The Sleepover
All criticism is good criticism; tell me how to make my writing better and i'll try to improve it so. i know it was short, if doing so wouldn't mean having to re-submit, i would turn it all into one chapter.
Alcoholic Influences
He was well aware of haiden's critical gaze as he poured a single shot into a plastic red party cup, and filled in to the brim with coke.
Club Singapore-Part 1-Puss Out of Boots
This is my first story so be nice and constructive criticism is greatly appreciated. send it to [[email protected]](/cdn-cgi/l/email-protection) i am also making a website called studdlyduddlydoo's new to furrydom because i'm new to furrydom.
The edge
Constructive criticism is welcome!
The Dragon Spirit Wishes
#1 of the dragon spirit wishes this is my first poem of this sort, so be critical, but understand if it's not great. the dragon spirit wishes i wish i could walk. i wish i could run. i wish i could fly, fly into the sky.
Confusion
Take it easy on the criticism! ;3 the great wolf howled to the empty sky, his confusion his pain plain to hear. "why? why must i endure? all the others receive the happiness they wish for..."
The twining roses
Please give me some constructive criticism and comments.
The twinning roses
Please give me some constructive criticism and comments.