Family Days 14
He would cook something at his house and mary would do the same and then they would switch meals and critique one another: even if at first mary had done nothing but critiqued him.
Pokemon Crystal Pornlocke Chapter 3
This is also 18+ please don't read if you are under 18+ feel free to comment any critiques. pokemon is not owned by me but is owned by gamefreak and nintendo thumbnail image is not owned by me and belongs to gamefreak and nintendo pornlocke rules: 1.
Draconic Beginnings (01)
Any criticism or critique to be offered will be very much appreciated. once apon a time, in realms rife with strife, struggle, and turmoil, there upon a stony precipice, 'neath a cliff and hidden lay a small clutch of eggs.
The Loner, Chapter 1
With that in mind, don't hold back with your critiques, if you're inclined to give them. i want to improve, and i can't do that if people are softballing their reviews. thanks, -tr ps-i know this was already uploaded at my last account 'texas ranger'.
Welcome to the Dorms
critique is welcome as are commissions if you like what what you see. it was the usual day at the end of summer. hot, but starting to cool down compared to the last heatwave everyone has been complained about.
Izumi's Me Time
She had an inherent critique for anything she watched. izumi headed to her bedroom to peruse her collection of printed adult imagery.
Springtime (Original & Unedited)
It'd just be for the lulz, but i always appreciate a little critique. i'd say something to the affect (effect?) of "have fun reading!", but i know that it won't be much fun. it certainly wasn't fun for me.
My friend is a dinosaur - 01
As always, comments, suggestions, corrections and critique is always welcome. **my friend is a dinosaur** duck, jump, run fast, aiming around for possible enemies.
Robery Gone Right
Gift story done for ryloo, comments and critique welcome! by: malic "you seemed to pick the wrong house," came a voice one could tell was filtered through a smug grin.
Seven Minutes In Heaven
Comments and critiques are welcome. this was it, bora thought. tonight was the end of the year party that he'd been planning for his seventh grade class.
Legend of the Dovahkiin (WIP)
I appreciate any feedback and critiquing on my writing like if i have too much or not enough detail, repeating certain words too much, or if you would want to see the beginning / it continued. but most importantly, enjoy! i heard it before i saw it.
Untitled Story Chapter 3
And please critique! chapter 2 two days had passed since anji tied smitty's arms, and the slave could scarcely think of anything else.