Project_Demise - Excerpt
I ask only for the harshest of critiques, because when my book is finished i'll have to deal with even harsher critics. so give me a totally honest, no holds barred critique. i'm a big boy. i can handle it.
Revelation: A Twokinds Fanfic
\*\*\* notes this is the first fanfiction and first adult story i've written, so please feel free be brutal with your critiques.
In the World After: Chapter 4
As always, critique and comments are great, and don't be afraid of honest critique. if you notice any inconsistencies, just let me know, and me and maeve will get it worked out. david had been shot. jonathon, ben, and stephen had been killed.
Different
Comment and critique as harsh as possible. i need to learn how to write even better! oh, and i know that there's no yiff in this story, the following instalments do, though. this is more to set the stage. -- the spring air was pleasant today.
Roads Untraveled - Epilogue
Comments and critiques are welcome and encouraged. "sis? you in?" adrian checked around sick bay, dipping into the medical office with two energetic otters in tow. "oh, hey carbon. you're looking decent today." "looks can be deceiving.
The Bet, WIP
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I Know (poem)
Ok, not at all one of my firsts on this, but its still so-so i think =/ one of the few i have on da (i have a lot actually written down but i just am really self-conscious about things xd) critique and comment please!
My Dragoness and Me
This is my first attempt at writing, so any questions or comments or critique is gladly appreciated at [[email protected]](/cdn-cgi/l/email-protection) this story is mine, please don't steal it.
Before the Show
Could use a general critique if you happen to have any. i'm just getting back into writing. this is an excerpt from a scene i'm working on.
Allurians: First Contact - Chapter 01
As always, comments, critiques and suggestions are always welcome, as they help keep me motivated in the future.
Takumori's First Dolphin
Comments, constructive critiques and such are welcome:) flames will be used to roasty marshmellows;) finna gave a low trill as she stepped from the shower, using a towel to wipe most of the water off but leaving the rest on her blubber to keep it
Prismo's Pleasuring Present
As always, comments and critiques are appreciated! "ready for your present, pup?" prismo whined, feeling another dribble of pre leak from the awfully tight chastity cage, adding to his already drenched balls.