Summer Adventures part 2
#3 of summer adventures _authors note: ok heres part two same disclamers as lat time underage sex with two or more minors coming soon don't read if you don't like and if it's ilegal in your region. all constructive critisism is welcomed._ _
Nezoroth Chapter 2: Trial by Fire
Please rate and comment, i could use the critisism. nezoroth 2: trial by fire saz blinked. then reared back, dropping the still half stunned micro drake to the ground. "why, you little bastard."
Between Light and Darkness
This sort of thing,read on and enjoy.this story is very short because it is my first story.if it's good i might make a longer sequel,but until then tell me what you think and don't think that your going to make me mad or hurt my feelings if it's bad and you critisize
Strait from the Sales Block
Any comments and critisism are appreciated and i appollogise in advance for spelling errors and grammer. 'take your pick! any sex, any age! we have it all! if i'm lying my hat is ten feet tall!
A Dolphins Crush: in the Beginning pt 1
This is my first story on ys so please leave some comments on how to improve if you think it needs it constructive critisism if you please:) it's another wet day, hell its wet every day since being a dolphin means you live in the sea. what i mean
Chapter 1- Blood and Tear
Just wanted to say sorry to whoever i jacked the idea from. anyway, please comment, and rate, cause i wanted to get an idea of what i can improve on, and i know im not perfect. i am far from the best author here, so please give me some constructive critisism
Sometimes Dead is Better Chapter 1
I want critisism... and ideas for my next story e\_e i already have ideas but i want moar. sorry for the lack of sex and the blackout. you see im working on writing smut but i just can't do it good. im a serious fantasy writer :p
Fang's Pussy
One where there is no lame plot, no lame introduction, just sex like you like it. feel free to critisize me or compliment me.
Fortune-chapter one Love??? (part one)
Hi, this is my first romance story ever so, critisism is great, constructive or othrwise, in case i'm that bad... anyway, this is the first chapter to a book thing that i thought up a few days ago.
Thicker than words
I want to see if i improved since i wrote this old piece, so critisize all ya want. i never thought this could happen.
Chapter 1 : All Hope is Lost
Feel free for critisism, though none of this hate mail i know i will probably be getting. and for the record, ask any questions you may have and i will answer to the best of my ability.
To Live Immortal
I happily accept the sandwich technique for critisism. also, if you can offer help in helping make me a better writer, i will gladly accept it. my inbox is always open!