Changes (BETA)
Need opinions, critique, feedback in general. oh, works best in fixed width due to the crazy formatting from the software i was using.
Ablaze Ch.4: Battle of Senchen (1)
As usual: comments, critique, ratings, and anything else are all appreciated! ps: is there preference of longer or shorter submissions?
Operation Black Fang - Vulpine Specter PROLOGUE
I hope you enjoy it, and i expect some decent critique from you all! more than appreciated here, as i can iron out any kinks it may have.
Ze'Tazz - Conception
In any case, it's the first bit (literally, his hatching.) and i hope to get some good critique and responses. enjoy. ^_^ the story of ze'tazz conception - "i see the tip! keep pushing captain!" cried the doctor.
All in a Days Work Pt.1
So, feel free to critique and i'll take it under consideration. i hope this story to be the first part of a semi-long series. so please, enjoy and feel free to drop me a line. thank you and good night.
Chapter 2- Moving In
Comments and critiques are welcome! :) chapter 2 myles gathered his belongings the next morning and everything in his old apartment was stored away in his duffel bag and carry-on backpack.
Warrick's Tale part 0
Please enjoy and leave a comment, critique is always welcome. it took all warrick's will power to appear calm on the outside. while on the inside a storm of emotions raged. denial, 'this must be a joke, they can't be doing this to me.'
Deciphering The Past - 05 - Discoveries
All positive critiques and comments and i went to the very last page of comments and i noticed some scary comments and of course, since they are at the very end of the page, no one will see them, especially when there are a few dozens of thousands of comments
Kaa and Mowgli, the First Meeting.
First time writer, so please, give me critiques but keep it civil. the night slowly settled on the jungle like a warm blanket as he woke, his tummy rumbled softly as he licked his chops noisily. yes. tonight he would need to hunt.
A small town welcome, Pt. 8
Comments, compliments, critiques, insults, leave a comment. they both dozed off, sleeping while caressing one another. cam felt the warm fur in his hand, slowly opening his eyes. the fur, a lovely mix of different shades of tan.
The Tunnel
I look forward to comments and suggestions, as well as critique and any errors that you might spot that i missed in my personal editing. for those of you interested, this is my submission to the wordsmith awards challenge by naraki wolf.
Part 1 - The Pain
#5 of a husky's surprise \*\*\* this is my first story, so i'm 100% open to critique; i know i'll need it ^^; \*\*\* -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------