Blind Prince Ch 1 & 2 *Working title*
My friend always lavishes praise on my writing, but a sample size of one isn't any way to really improve. so here i present my first original work to get some feedback and improve myself as a writer. so feel free to let me know what you think.
A Battle Fought on All Fronts: Part 1
I am always looking to improve and feedback would be much appreciated! as a brief introduction to the world: captain niphi is an irali warrior who fights on the front line of the great rebellion.
Terror Dogs
Moving quickly from rooftop to rooftop he follows the smell with his improved olfactory senses until he stops just across from a familiar house.
Chapter 6: Differing Views
"either i'm getting lazy with my training or you're improving exponentially, which would be excellent. you remind me of myself when i first started out. you're going to be a great trainer."
Reaching for the Stars - Chapter 03: Football Buddies
We still have around three months so keep up the good work and keep on improving." everyone clapped their hands again, and this time the coach smiled. "thank you for coming today. have a great weekend."
Virishian History
After tens of thousands of years of pre-history, the virishian tribes begun developing new weapons in their struggle for survival: the discovery of fire was paired with improved weapons of defense and offense.
Aftermath chapter 1: wake up
Please tell me how i can improve future chapters and i'll try my best to improve. also, did you notice that the name of the military base "greikoi" is the greek word for origin? i think its fitting considering that this is the first chapter.
Andre
In butte montana usa, biological synthetics incorporated was making human blood and organs to improve their health. made a lot of it, with dna recombination. so the price went way down and everyone who needed it could get it.
Darren's Shopping Trip
And remember, i'll take any pointers on how to improve myself, so don't hold back! ^\_^
The Digimon Wars Continued Chapter 6 You're Back?!
It was right next to the stairs and had a computer and various of different notes on meetings and such, another one of michaels new improvements.
An Otter and His Fox
This is my first story so feel free to give me any tips, i would really like to improve! in the process of being rewritten, improvements to come soon!
All Good Things Stop at 8
"no, yet i'll find some mayhap, yet i'm only going to improve damages, no more so to improve the state in general. the natural balances of this world are merely in place yet who was the one guardians that are gone?" i replied to debacho.