one nation (poem)
In this "one nation under god", Our sense of right is just a fraud. We pray for death in a foreign country, While people here are ever hungry. We hate the gays for their way of love, Then pass off our hate as words from above. We're afraid of...
All Over Soon
Give me your thoughts and critisism thank you._ **all over soon** written by: jon ballenger [verse 1] with my weapon drawn i begin the hunt at dawn i shall hunt you all down one by one i bet all you can do now is run you don't know
Summer Adventures part 2
#3 of summer adventures _authors note: ok heres part two same disclamers as lat time underage sex with two or more minors coming soon don't read if you don't like and if it's ilegal in your region. all constructive critisism is welcomed._ _
Between Light and Darkness
Sort of thing,read on and enjoy.this story is very short because it is my first story.if it's good i might make a longer sequel,but until then tell me what you think and don't think that your going to make me mad or hurt my feelings if it's bad and you critisize
Love after all
This is my first time writing a story, so go easy on your critisism. \_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_
Thicker than words
I want to see if i improved since i wrote this old piece, so critisize all ya want. i never thought this could happen.
Alice In The Woods
Suggestions and constructive critisism are appreciated._ _originally written for [z-byte](http://www.sofurry.com/user/view/profile?
Two Coyotes Dancing. [It's poetry, sorry guys]
._ _so be crushing with critisism. seriously! i was never formally or informally trained. i like how this goes, but i have no idea if it is good or not. so hit me with your worst cutting critisisms.
The Meeting
"a while," they smirked in tandem as alan panted quietly **\* \* \* \* \*** **fin** **afterword:** i may add a second part to this, if enough people enjoy my little tale, so please give me all the feedback and critisism that you
Second Chances: Chapter 1
Feel free to critisize as i am just starting to write for others to actually view so i'll probably need alot of improvement.
Niko and Danny: Day 1
.^ please comment on typos and stuff, critisize me!!! i must know if i'm a good writer or not. if i am, then i might continue this series i have in mind ^.^ p.s.
From Chains to Riches: Chapter 5
. ~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~\*~ end of part 5 i really appreciate comments on my writing, weather it be one to congratulate me or to critisize me, i still appreciate it.