Aric's Life
criticisms are my writing fuel!
The Little Grown Up Part II
Blah part ii is done hope you liked it criticism is welcomed :d!
Unexpected Love - Chapter 1 - They Meet
Well there you go that's chapter 1, this is my first story, so people please comment, could use some constructive criticism or anything.
Hope
Note that this is just an experiment of mine and my first time doing such a thing, so if you have any constructive criticism then please post it to me in pm :) thank you!! _well hello.... it appears you've stumbled into the wrong place, or well....
Introduction to 'The Student'
They are criticized, prosecuted, and even attacked by extremist religious, scientific, and political groups claiming that such 'abominations' should not be allowed to exist for fear that they may endanger humanity due to their brutal animalistic nature.
Heat Games II: Sweeps - Prologue
One of the main criticism of his show was that it turned something natural, even_ holy_, like the creation of new life in kurtulmak's image, and turned it into some sort of tawdry entertainment. he wished his critics could see him now.
Pathfinding: An Adult Choose Your Own Adventure, Twenty-Eighth Entry
After the critical failure, each character then had a 50% chance of being safe (1-50), a 25% chance of being captured (51-75), and a 25% chance of being badly injured (76-100).
Catch of the Day
Cidnie watched with a critical eye, not moving a muscle while the tiger worked. at least, not until aldrin began slipping the towel into his genital slit. at that point he felt the first stirrings of arousal.
Daddy takes care of me (M/M)
* * * constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated . this is my first story and i'm hoping to maybe write more in the future let me know what you think :3
Unexpected Love Part 3
My "childhood" was just me running from the critics. i learned to hide my pain behind a fake smile. then ... i met denis. he was always positive. he cared about me. he suported me. we used to play together only and around him i was myself.
Blue Valley Underground - Part 19 - Beginning (End)
Reviews are appreciated, even criticism. i'm new to serious writing and i would like to know what i can improve on for next time, whether it be pacing, characterization, grammar, or whatever.
Love Sucks ch. 1
* * * looking at myself in the mirror i'm not happy by my apearance. but i convince myself that we are our own biggest critic. i run a brush through my long black hair and pat down the black fur along my face.