Lost Souls - Chapter 1 (Redux)
This is a revised version of chapter one with a bit of added material. nothing really fancy or drastically changed, just a bit more revision which was aided by the input of the amazing huevadoches naumova (thanks hueva!!!).
Bovine Parents (Ch. 23)
I got a chance to test the revised serum quite recently. outcome was positive." _tested recently? there's someone else?_ “wait—" tommy started to speak, but was cut off by frank's next question: “nervous?" “sorta..."
Tropical Revised - Chapter Seven
The otters weren't alone on the kilometer-long track; dozens of other students were stretched across the track, including their friends. When they started, they were all together but since the others have pulled far ahead of the two otters, who were...
Changing Seasons: New Years 2010 (2/2)
#4 of changing seasons okay, i know the quality of the last story was pretty bad, so i decided to revise the last half. that's why i took so long. but the good news is i got to finish the valentine's edition while doing the full revision.
Chapter 4 - The Three Little Pigs and the Big Bad Wolf
So get used to your life in your revised story. you can never go back." "fine with me," said the wolf fiercely. "i wouldn't go back even if i was dying. i control my own destiny, and i will never follow the flow again."
The Magnum Opus - Chapter 7
Seated on the throne was an enormous revised, a spear in one hand and wearing a thick, iron chain necklace around his neck. “percy… reeve…” he breathed. “grim…” grunted verik.
Feyrahl, SF Ch 1.5
"be that as it may, the only way their opinion will change is if mackenzie helps them to revise it." mac hadn't realized that the commander had used his first name until rolin's ears raised and the ranger called attention to it.
The Booth Revised - Part 2
Chapter 12 - two lovers never has a wolf been so glad to see his front door - one more damn 'emergency meeting', about reports that had been revised, re-written, re-done...
Be Kind To Those Less Fortunate 1
Update (11/12/09) -- revised the story, adding in new content. be kind to those less fortunate cold. that was the thought that floated through the draenei's mind. it was cold.
Zion: Light of the New Moon Part 2, Ch 1.4 Myrh
"spread out... but stay close together." the priest revised his earlier suggestion. "stay as a group and don't touch anything." yearl noted. "that works too." ryan acknowledged, and started up the stairs after kell.
Trials: Chapter III
I had to revise the old paperwork for his medical history, myself now written as the legal guardian, removing our parents from the contact lists. later in the night, lewis's phone rang, waking me up from a horrible dream.
Break, or How I Became A Superhero
:p update: i've revised the story, added about seven hundred more words. enjoy. :p ==== my name is break and i am a superhero. god, how arrogant does that sound? but it's true (after a fashion).