Undertow : Prologue -- Chapter 4 - Anticipation
While i wasn't certain that it would all go smoothly, i did think that i would be able to turn any bad conversation we might get into around.
Safety Lost
Even if it did look like a bad conversation in the making, thorn was looking forward to seeing sam again. the clock showed that almost twenty minutes had passed, too much for him to catch up to the two rabbits now. "crap..."
Ebon Rites - Chapter 7: Loyal Recourse
She cried, placing the back of her hand over her forehead head with bad dialogue, and even worse acting. lurking around them, the occult were now set, and an unknown number of them were now in position.
A Subtle Symbiosis (M/M)
Too bad talking wolves don't have penis bones like wild ones," steven continued, and preemptively held his arm up in defense. brutus jolted towards him. "the fuck is wrong with you? you can't fuckin' wait your turn?"
"Rift" Chapter 05
“me is sorry i bad speaking english. many is find hard for bil to speak english." “you will do just fine. several of our crew today speak bil, so you won't be lost." jacob offered up. “well, looks like our crew are ready to rock and roll."
I'm sure He has a Plan (Ch. 7)
Wonder what damaged her self-image so badly? speech with asterisks (*) indicate the serpent tongue - the naga's native language.
Redwoods
A boy invites his friend for a sleepover.â friend agrees, comes over and drops his bags in the basement.â boy's older brother is there, with a camera and tripod for some inexplicable but obvious reason.â bad dialogue ensues, then older brother
Proud Like A Lion...King (M/M, M/F Lion King Self-Insert)
bad. talking to sora helped him realize there was a lot in the world he almost refused to experience. being intimate with kovu taught him there was no reason to feel shame.
YEEN'D.com
Kisses and bites, fluff and musk, and more bad dialogue than one man could possibly endure. can major manly, submissive humie extraordinaire, survive the affections of four large hyenas? will his pelvis break before his will?
The Persistent Dragon Hatches a Plan
With the help of some very appreciated criticism, i realized that the first chapters were kind of just a clusterfuck of poor storytelling and bad dialog.
Excuses 3: Lost Bunny
badly. "speaking of close, if you keep that up i'm gonna spooge all over you." "there are better places for that to go." casey said the words before realizing his mouth had moved.
Nigh, it comes
"well should i go talk to her, or would that make things worse," i asked feeling bad. speaking