Daddy Daughter Bonding
Please comment and critique! thank you! :) once i finish my breakfast, my dad walks in the room wearing his fitted grey suit, his hair slicked back and his cologne whiffed through the air and into my nose. "well sweetie, i have to go now," he says.
Kinky Kitty part 2
critique would be great and i hope you enjoy.
NewU - The Coed
First foray into this kind of thing, any and all critique welcome. jesse's backpack clattered about the floor of her dorm. after the strap broke, she let it, it was only the cherry on top of the mess that was the raccoon's day.
The Explorer's Lament *TEST/Critique requested*
Long, twisting hallways, cursed stone walls, damned souls, rancid slime of things that died eons ago; the tunnels of Orak were nothing short of hellish and corrupting. The sanest minds, strongest bodies and quickest wits turns to dust when faced with...
Should've Invited Me
Needing critiques, and the tags help get views for that! this story actually covers several different types of interaction, all tags are relevant and mentioned in the story. i'd appreciate any feedback!
Unfit Trainer: Chapter 1 part 1
This is only one part of one chapter, but i need some critique before continuing this story. please ask questions and critique my work, so i know what i need to improve on for the next parts.
IWager
critique is welcomed. "mmf, i gotta go sir," a long whimper, "can i please go?" "not until you cum pup," a deep, lust laced voice replied. a paw stroked and teased the red and rigid wolf shaft.
Unintended Intruder - 11
I can't promise not to critique, though." "that would be awesome," terry said with a laugh. "i don't think abby's into voyeurism, though." "you should ask her," marcy said with a sly look in her eyes.
Seven Minutes In Heaven
Comments and critiques are welcome. this was it, bora thought. tonight was the end of the year party that he'd been planning for his seventh grade class.
Springtime (Original & Unedited)
It'd just be for the lulz, but i always appreciate a little critique. i'd say something to the affect (effect?) of "have fun reading!", but i know that it won't be much fun. it certainly wasn't fun for me.
Caged Desires
As always comments, critique, and suggestions are welcome. ben was afraid to leave the car. he had never done something this bold before. the fox looked at himself in the rear view mirror again to make sure his makeup had not come off during the drive.
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Comments, critiques, and suggestions are welcome! adam groaned as his eyes began to open. whatever he had done the previous night had made him groggy this morning. he was still trying to open his eyes when he shivered.