An Obedient Fall
The writing style is simple and naked and the tale is told in the present tense for maximum sadomasochistic punch. should be very fun if you're into that. =3 - setup is quick and dirty, with just a smidge of worldbuilding.
Bastion - Pt. 2
Still the same issue of past and present tense failures.
Visit to the zoo 2nd part
Be aware that i am french and as such i have sometimes a hard time with sentences, and that also suffer from a problem that plague me also in french : i write in a weird past - present tense combo that is not the best tense for stories.
Breeding Grounds -Wolf TF (adult)-
Just added a few paragraphs/scenes and reworded some of the grammar so the present tense and pretense stuff flows better *i hope *** update *** 5-20-14 *** found some more grammatical errors to fix.
It's Always Time - Chapter Seven: We End as We Began
"you keep referring to her in the present tense. it's not over?" > > "not if she can still move," dee said. the slush-covered overshirt started to inch forward. "she's heard everything we've said.
Inhuman Relations
Second person and present tense is a challenge and a half along with this style, but i'm confident that i wrote it to the best of my ability.
2.5 - Close Encounters
He covered his maw, modestly. " ... past tensed when you're present tensing?" he finished, cutely. whiskers twitching. that gentle, slightly-effeminate voice of his, tinged with squeaks. "that's a paradox!" another sip o' milkshake. "i'm tipsy.
The Ryan Story Part XIII
Ryan's head snapped up at the present tense and he smiled hesitantly. "you think they are alive?" "i think they are, yes," pax replied. "your parents are very clever. if anyone would survive, they would." "athena said the same thing."
Maranatha - Chapter XIX - as told by Mark Kovalis
"du haven't dit me wo we venir, malloy," elsaesser growls (note the present tense, because the donkeys were knocked out and we moved past them), but malloy ignores him. "malloy! je'm speaking to dich!"
Firestorm ch 10 - Death and Destruction
Silver noted the use of the present tense, and wished that vikki could hear both sides of the conversation.
Visit to the zoo 1st part
Be aware that i am french and as such i have sometimes a hard time with sentences, and that also suffer from a problem that plague me also in french : i write in a weird past - present tense combo that is not the best tense for stories.
Visit to the zoo 3rd part
Be aware that i am french and as such i have sometimes a hard time with sentences, and that also suffer from a problem that plague me also in french : i write in a weird past - present tense combo that is not the best tense for stories.i'll try to finish part