The Pet
If it works for you, i'd love to hear more suggestions on topics to write about in this style and also any critiques to enhance the experience!
Puppy Love Chapter 2
I have no idea how it will end, so any ideas, comments, and critiques are welcome. flames will be laughed at and discarded._ all day monday i couldn't focus on my classes.
Lewd times with Jolteon
critiques are welcome. jolteon's saliva tingled sweetly like toothache plant, like my gums had been scrubbed with sugar. i swallowed, and the shock made my throat seize up; jolteon's tongue grazed my cheek as i jerked away.
Jack's Jockficiation
critique welcomed :3 jack's mind spun as the thin otter fell back onto the couch, the vial dropping onto the carpet next to his shoes.
The Start
Newer to writing, please provide constructive critique as it helps an artist grow. or let me know if you like it! it was a particularly bitter sweet day, rhajaro felt as though it would never come.
Liam and Muireann
When he was finished, he critiqued the result. not only did it say exactly what it should, he thought it was his best yet. he bundled it up, and set off for where it needed to go. once in private with ciaran, liam explained himself.
Vixi's Shocking Meal
Comment if you like, but please, i don't want critiques on this one either.
Before the Show
Could use a general critique if you happen to have any. i'm just getting back into writing. this is an excerpt from a scene i'm working on.
waltz into moonlight
They turn and see the instructor applausing them, so they smile a bit and bow, walking over, turning off the song and talking with them, as they talk, the instructor gives a few minor critiques and then praises them for their hard work in organizing their
Prologue
It's my first time trying it out, so critiques are appreciated, if you can find anything i can do better. enjoy!
Mini Scene: A Lion, Vixen, and the Search for Better Scene Description
My lion-y heart is decently strong, so don't feel like you need to hold back on critique. the room was bathed in a soft luminescent white light.
Canvas and Melody - Chapter 3
#5 of canvas and melody all comments and critiques welcome, and any questions will be answered in character and henceforth canon.