The Models
The critics' reactions were equally mixed. the critics who always followed the latest avant garde art fashions loved it.
You promised (Chapter 1)
criticism is welcome, as i would like to improve the quality of my writing. so without further ado, and no more gabbing by me...
Muscle Growth Game - Public Alpha Test v0.07
- critical testing needed @ casino slot machines \*\*\* bunch of new stuff including (but not limited to) hairstyles, body hair options, the casinoooo (just slot machines for now), a bdsm tent in the carnival, the carnival pink tent event, irongard city
Morsel
A critic was the job carl had which lead to all the owners of the spots he liked, both big and small, to give him all the goodies he could handle - with a tempting price that grew him to a greater width.
"Daggers of Darkness" - Prologue
I only ask that you please keep criticisms constructive and polite. story, characters, and related art © 2013-2017 ronald j. lebeck (that's me).
Coin’s Collection
[/i][b]performance check: critical success. [/b]dror followed then, lying down on the cold stone floor before he lifted his legs, spread them.
Carghago and the eye of the truth- The court - part 2
I wrote this in dutch because no one can critic me then off grammar and that sorts carghago keek in de richting van yksu, vol met angst. "ik weet niet of we dit moeten doen... het voelt neit goed."
Lane and Zephy, chapter two, Pets Play in the Park
If you like the story, great, if you want to comment to me about it, great, if you want to give constructive criticism, great.
new job, new experience
Said the fox startling maunri "hi i'm here for a job" maunri said "well heh we cant give you the job yet first we need to critic you" roxie said with a big grin on her face "but i wouldn't worry you look great i'm sure you'll get the job" maunri was
The Story of the Noble Dragon, Critias
Feel free to give me some constructive criticism, because i would really like this fable to seem relatively legit for what i plan to do with it.
Why I'm fucked up
criticism is welcome and appreciated. see my journal entry "soon" for more details "but why kehlan?" "because i'm going to do something it'll be funny and if you don't i'm going to tell mom you watched adult swim."
As you wish, Ruki
Easier to read google drive version can be found here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/.....h_vam1qri/edit as always, any criticism is good criticism, and i appreciate any faves and comments, it lets me know people are enjoying these.