The world has gone to hell]introduction/prolge
This is the first time i've ever writen anything for others to see.so cut me a little slack if the spelling is off.i have a bit of a short attention span,so the writing could take awhile.other then that be as critical as you want,i stopped caring what people
About: Shyness
Should i not be so offended and scared by criticism ? should i stop comparing myself to others ? should i stop trying to please everybody ? should i stop living for others' approval ? should i stop feeling myself so guilty for no reason ?
Words
Also, looking for an editor, or criticism. or both. feel free to comment with a brutally honest opinion. conversation the sound of vehicles on the freeway, just close enough to recognize but distant enough to not catch anyone's attention.
Morsel
A critic was the job carl had which lead to all the owners of the spots he liked, both big and small, to give him all the goodies he could handle - with a tempting price that grew him to a greater width.
Desperation for Peace
Regardless; as always, constructive criticism is always welcome even if i wind up falling into my bad, and very old, writing habits.
A Death Knight's Tale
I am open to criticism, and how to make this story better. thank you! pain. misery. death. anger. hatred. this is what she woke up to... the first thing she saw? darkness. she could feel hard stone underneath her. cold. seeping into her bones.
My Dreams are in Stories
Comments and constructive criticism are, as always, very much welcome. :) -- my dreams are in stories -- my dreams become stories, all from my mind, of dragons and wizards, each sword is drawn. fantasy epics like no other kind. "humble beginnings?
[12] Personal Log #2
This was a critical blow to the new earth settlement. jeff was a leader and inspiration to the team. it was because of him that this group of humans got together and were making history.
Muscle Growth Game - Public Alpha Test v0.07
- critical testing needed @ casino slot machines \*\*\* bunch of new stuff including (but not limited to) hairstyles, body hair options, the casinoooo (just slot machines for now), a bdsm tent in the carnival, the carnival pink tent event, irongard city
The Creator
I'll take any you've got but please limit them to constructive criticism or tell me what you think. i am the one, the origin, the forgotten. there are few who know of my existence and all of them are almost as ageless as myself.
The ballad of Daelin (W.I.P.)
#1 of ballad of daelin if this gets around 5-10 likes i'll continue this story and i'll take criticism. "the west, the new frontier. i came out here for money, but all i did was become a thief.
The evening
critics are appreciated. it was 6 in the evening. hindenburg's eco-system began their daily turn-over. the orange sky was fading fast, drew nearer and nearer to the half-rounded ruby red sun as time ticked by.