Access Violation
More and more error messages flashed inside her mind, until one large one pushed out all others: critical system failure! shutdown imminent! critical system failure! shutdown imminent!
Transformative Works
He knew he should be listening, and that his friend probably had some good criticism going on right now, but he couldn't. it just hurt.
A Big Surprise
* * * criticism would be greatly appreciated, as long as it is constructive :).
My first time with a dog
I would love some constructive criticism. last summer my friend was going on a longer vacation in thailand with his girlfriend and he asked me to look after his dog.
Grounding The Jacking Jolt
And gorumon felt his body burning as he tried to discharge, despite having nothing left to give…realizing numbly under the ruthless haze of pleasure that he was in critical danger.
Last one left: prologue
criticism and feedback will be appreciated so i can make improvements in the future and if you liked what you've read then don't hesitate to leave a watch and a fav! enjoy!!!!! i can still feel my sins howling over my shoulder.
Unpleasant Developments, Chapter one: Breakfast and Bedlam.
Please comment, and offer all criticisms to me. again, i need to improve.
The Little Grown Up
Constructive criticism is appreciated. :d
Unfortunate Fortunes
The young man who's name is not yet being released is in critical condition but is respected to make a full recovery, if it where not for aden's bravery and will the young man would not be here today...."_
Chapter 3
That was a critical aspect he had drilled into me repeatedly, about my new life. throw in the connection with sinclair, it would be all bad for everyone involved. many people died in order for me to exist.
2 : Cuckolding
Tell me, and i will surely take your criticism into consideration - and ignore it. joking, or not, idk. enjoy reading. "is that how it started?" the older reptilian voice asked me. "sort of. i mean, i started dating tom in august, britney in september.
Green: Time's End (prologue)
Looking for criticism as usual. i'm not the type to care whether or not you hate fnaf or whatever. go ahead and tell me so and i'll write something else for you. and with that, here ends the prologue of "green: time's end"**